Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

harharmahadev wrote:

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

The original poem is not a haiku.  Haiku is Japanese poetry, so it doesn't have to be grammatically correct.

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

The original poem is not a haiku.  Haiku is Japanese poetry, so it doesn't have to be grammatically correct.

If haiku is only japanese poetry, how could basanthee's poem "make a nice haiku" by merely reducing the number of syllables, according to your suggestion? wouldn't one need to rewrite it in japanese?

today, a haiku is a poem that conforms to the structure, rhythm, and rules of the japanese haiku, no matter what language it's written in.

correct grammar is important in every kind of writing, but in poetry, one may ignore it temporarily to achieve an objective that's far greater than grammatical correctness. I don't see any such merit in your so-called haiku, which is merely incomprehensible.

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

The original poem is not a haiku.  Haiku is Japanese poetry, so it doesn't have to be grammatically correct.

If haiku is only japanese poetry, how could basanthee's poem "make a nice haiku" by merely reducing the number of syllables, according to your suggestion? wouldn't one need to rewrite it in japanese?

today, a haiku is a poem that conforms to the structure, rhythm, and rules of the japanese haiku, no matter what language it's written in.

correct grammar is important in every kind of writing, but in poetry, one may ignore it temporarily to achieve an objective that's far greater than grammatical correctness. I don't see any such merit in your so-called haiku, which is merely incomprehensible.

TruthSeeker wrote:Yup. Keep the suspense. She was protecting a spider from being smashed?

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

My theory is complete opposite to yours.

Madhur aunty was trying to protect poor Ramesh from Ms. Kiddo, with all the per-conceived notions she formulated after reading her posts on this forum. But later, she finds out what a jerk Ramesh is, and then that hurts her more.

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

My theory is complete opposite to yours.

Madhur aunty was trying to protect poor Ramesh from Ms. Kiddo, with all the per-conceived notions she formulated after reading her posts on this forum. But later, she finds out what a jerk Ramesh is, and then that hurts her more.

haha good one...

i r'ber CB used to say how people never explain their poems, as it's much more interesting to see people's interpretations.

However, in this case, I wrote this poem from a man's perspective...

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

My theory is complete opposite to yours.

Madhur aunty was trying to protect poor Ramesh from Ms. Kiddo, with all the per-conceived notions she formulated after reading her posts on this forum. But later, she finds out what a jerk Ramesh is, and then that hurts her more.

Kris wrote:

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

My theory is complete opposite to yours.

Madhur aunty was trying to protect poor Ramesh from Ms. Kiddo, with all the per-conceived notions she formulated after reading her posts on this forum. But later, she finds out what a jerk Ramesh is, and then that hurts her more.

>>>The fallout with Ramesh came later for Madhur aunty. Here is how it unfolded. Ramesh was sending notes to our favorite narrator, which at first blush seemed like stalking. Madhur aunty reflexively became protective, but she came to realize the protectee was no babe in the woods and had caused a few heartbreaks in her time, leaving behind broken men in her wake who still prayed for her well-being. Ramesh was just one among the victims. Mad Aunty then began to sympathize with Ramesh and in in due course that turned to affection and indeed love. Ramesh did not reciprocate and one day Mad Aunty hacked into his email and found a stack of sent mails ('you are looking nice, bk' , 'the woman who tried to run you off the road was quite misguided', ' your friends on CH are god's gift to mankind' etc). Mad Aunty was heartbroken and ceased all communication with him.

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Kinnera wrote:

Kris wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

>>>Was this Madhur aunty? I got it.  Madhur aunty was protecting you from Ramesh, but later had second thoughts, after reading posts on this forum. That's it.  I solved it.

My theory is complete opposite to yours.

Madhur aunty was trying to protect poor Ramesh from Ms. Kiddo, with all the per-conceived notions she formulated after reading her posts on this forum. But later, she finds out what a jerk Ramesh is, and then that hurts her more.

>>>The fallout with Ramesh came later for Madhur aunty. Here is how it unfolded. Ramesh was sending notes to our favorite narrator, which at first blush seemed like stalking. Madhur aunty reflexively became protective, but she came to realize the protectee was no babe in the woods and had caused a few heartbreaks in her time, leaving behind broken men in her wake who still prayed for her well-being. Ramesh was just one among the victims. Mad Aunty then began to sympathize with Ramesh and in in due course that turned to affection and indeed love. Ramesh did not reciprocate and one day Mad Aunty hacked into his email and found a stack of sent mails ('you are looking nice, bk' , 'the woman who tried to run you off the road was quite misguided', ' your friends on CH are god's gift to mankind' etc). Mad Aunty was heartbroken and ceased all communication with him.

LOL! Good one, Kris. You are more creative than I imagined.

Kris wrote:

Kinnera wrote:
LOL! Good one, Kris. You are more creative than I imagined.

>>>Thanks...... I think!

harharmahadev wrote:

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

The original poem is not a haiku.  Haiku is Japanese poetry, so it doesn't have to be grammatically correct.

Merlot Daruwala wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

swapna wrote:

harharmahadev wrote:

Beatrix Kiddo wrote:it hurt when she fought him
but not as much as knowing
who she was protecting

If you reduced it by a few syllables, it would make a nice haiku.

It hurt when she fought him
to protect who she knows
that hurt more

haha!mahadev, basanthee's original poem sounds much better; yours is grammatically incorrect, and sounds contrived.

The original poem is not a haiku.  Haiku is Japanese poetry, so it doesn't have to be grammatically correct.

You also changed the meaning. The greater hurt in her original was from knowing who she was protecting, not from protecting who she knew.