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Post by Guest Thu Jan 12, 2012 12:53 pm

There's no song, for you and me
No poem, no painting, no movie

I searched long and wide
I talked around to find

to find someone who went through this
In the million years, complex relationship

what we have can't be so unheard
that no one ever penned down in words

There is no song for you and me
That I could hear like it's our story
this love, this affair, this fantasy
this despair, this distance, this tragedy


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Post by Propagandhi711 Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:01 pm

terrible shit. did PI write it?

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Post by Guest Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:02 pm

Propagandhi711 wrote:terrible shit.

Sad sorry you hated it. Just wrote whatever came to mind today.

Propagandhi711 wrote:did PI write it?

scratch

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Post by Propagandhi711 Thu Jan 12, 2012 1:07 pm

oh you wrote it. my complaints: there's no continuity from sentence to sentence, sometimes even in the same line, the sentiment expressed sounds 13yr oldy.

more critique later!

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