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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:23 am

please submit your submissions. here's mine

roses are red
violets are blue
when it comes to lover-forever
nothing like my Mr W

Very Happy

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Post by chameli Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:42 am

such a simple one to rhyme ..yet u fell short Sad

heres mine

roses are red

violets are blue

the higher the skirts

the better the view
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Post by Bittu Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:44 am

Yeh Kya Ajooba Tum Ne Paaya
Good to know Mr. W Can't Be Beat
Jisne Tum Ko W Se Milwaya
Perhaps He Deserved A Treat

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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:48 am

lol, good one.

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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:59 am

chameli wrote:such a simple one to rhyme ..yet u fell short Sad

heres mine

roses are red

violets are blue

the higher the skirts

the better the view

it's not that easy my dear
skirt mein ladki hai ya aunty
kisko pata kya hai
andar mandir hai ya ghanti

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Post by Bittu Mon Apr 30, 2012 11:04 am

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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 11:06 am

Bittu wrote:poetic 531322_266634170099470_122675684495320_505350_416130128_n

lol!

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Post by chameli Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:06 pm

Tracy Whitney wrote:
chameli wrote:such a simple one to rhyme ..yet u fell short Sad

heres mine

roses are red

violets are blue

the higher the skirts

the better the view

it's not that easy my dear
skirt mein ladki hai ya aunty
kisko pata kya hai
andar mandir hai ya ghanti

again fell short Sad

(rhyming hai ye filming nahi

theek kar doh na wahi sahi )



tere liye bas skirt kaafi hain re

maan gayee tuney liye hain saat phere

phir bhi aaja halkey se dheere dheere

waapas naachtey huey gali mein mere
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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:11 pm

uff. should be gali mein meri, not mere Razz don't screw up grammar just to rhyme.

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Post by chameli Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:42 pm

itna bhi poetic license nahi doge mujhey , dear heart ?
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Post by Guest Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:46 pm

chameli wrote:itna bhi poetic license nahi doge mujhey , dear heart ?

as long as u let me rhyme aunty with ghanti.

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Post by chameli Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:50 pm

Tracy Whitney wrote:
chameli wrote:itna bhi poetic license nahi doge mujhey , dear heart ?

as long as u let me rhyme aunty with ghanti.

aunty ghanti was puurfect

its the 1st and 3rd lines that posed a problem

u will agree
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